In my second draft I feel like I didn't change much. I'm kind of stumped on what to change. I didn't feel like I got really any helpful advice on what to do next. I know that Bryan wanted more sensory details which I agreed with. I added a few things to the "clips" of my life lol. And also to have more of my own voice. I took out a source I didn't really like that much. And kind of worked to get my argument across better- overall I want to argue: that if done correctly with a lot of support and communication divorce can turn out okay. In the beginning I kind of wanted to argue that maybe divorcing when the kids were very young or that divorcing in general was the best thing. And I kind of realized that that's not really true.
In my next draft I definitely want to make more changes but, I'm not really sure where. I know I maybe want to add another story and of course, work on better organization.
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