Rogerian Reflection 2.2

After writing my second draft I feel my paper is coming along. There are still some things I think I want to change and work on, but it's getting better. In this draft I mostly focused on my organization. In the first draft I kind of just said everything I thought and gave a lot of information, but it wasn't in an useful or beneficial order. I went through and tried to keep all similar ideas together rather than all over the place.

I also worked on giving more support to the other side of the argument. This task wasn't hard because of how much I loved going to the zoo when I was younger, I know first hand how magical these places are and what they mean to other kids. I also talked more about the educational benefits of zoos and circuses. I never would have learned the things I did without going to a zoo- it's what made me an animal lover.

I also worked on a better compromise. Rather than saying animals shouldnt be kept in captivity, I focused more on something we can all agree on- the abuse that takes place in circuses. I think everyone agrees that a circus side-show is often a sad life for an animal to live. These animals are put in extreme situations and don't live normal lives at all, they live the life of a traveler. I think everyone can agree action needs to be taken place to help animals in circuses.

But, I've been struggling to find another scholarly source. I also want to work more on my style of writing, to make the way I write more interesting rather than just talking about facts. I also want to work more on the conclusion and presenting my "common-ground" solution. I have the ideas in place, but I need to find a way to better present them in order to end my paper.